i really like the drums, overall they're nice, but they're a bit too loose
sometimes.. and some of the transitions could have been smoother.. 2:04
makes me cringe, 3:52 could have used a big floor tom hit or flam, etc..
i really like the guitar at 3:03, thats a nice transition.

both in melody and enunciation, even your overdubs. you're basically thom
yorke in a lower octave. but whatever, its one song, who knows how the
others sound. i wouldn't worry about that at all. the problem is the weakness
and thinness of the voice, its very shaky. to put it bluntly it sounds
(good) amateurish, while the other elements of the song sound professional.

i find it boring, like its just there to kill time, as if it was a first
take improv. if he played the lead on zoetrope than he can definitely
write something more interesting, fitting and/or melodic..

what instrument(s) do you guys study? you should put up more songs,
they're good. and maybe advertise in a newsgroup that hasn't been dead
for three years.

Y'know, I still haven't gotten around to listening to their album.
Ser-lack I am.

i just noticed this post, ignore this guy for the simple fact that he
said your song was the most derivative piece of work he's ever heard.
either he doesn't know what derivative means, or he's been living in
a cave his whole life or he's just an idiot. i'm going with #3.
either way not an opinion worth listening to. wow look, theres a hives
video on tv, your song isn't even the most derivative thing i've heard
in the last 30 seconds.

you can't help but be influenced by someone else, if you fight your
instincts it'll probably sound like you're trying too hard. very very
very few artists actually create something unique.. instead of
intentionally trying to make something unique just for the sake of it
being different, just make something that you like and hopefully what
you like sounds good. buddy rich said it best, a great musicisian is
just someone who doesn't get caught stealing.

i agree with whoever said your singing reminded them more of paul banks
(interpol) than thom yorke's. i thought it would be rather cheeky to offer
any actual advice but this last guy did it rudely enough and got away with
it - what i'd say about the singing is that it's something i used to do when
recording myself, which is sing the melody tunefully enough but, kinda of
weakly, so it sounds a little soft even though the right notes are there. i
get by that now by thinking "if i was on stage and had to belt this out so
it sounded like i meant it or something, how would i do it?" and it normally
yields a stronger performance. just my two cents, anyway.

oh, and it doesn't sound like radiohead. sounds pretty british, though.
something from . . . 1997. or 1998 perhaps. and my final thought - the
guitars need more of a kick to them at the parts where they're meant to be
loud, because they're at almost the same volume as they are during the rest
of the song (and they keep their smoothness) and it robs the song of its
dynamics. come on man, i know you be digging that soma sh.t and etcetera.
unless, o' course, it's meant to be like that.

JQM

P.S. on second listening i quite like it.